Friday, October 15, 2010

Twista

Twista got his nick name from the way he walks. With each step he bends his knee and twists toward it at a severe angle. He is a mental ward escapee and as well as a cheery crack enthusiast. He is unemployed but maintains his habit through his constant and haphazard hustle. If ever you need a single ladies loafer, a 50 cent "Nutty Professor" VHS or a low dose of Percaset for instance, he's your go-to guy. Despite his predictions of the buyers market for these types of products tends to be unrealistic, he has an uncanny ability to sense individual needs. Recently, I was walking to the corner store at the intersection of Desire and St. Claude, when I spotted him on the Neutral Ground parallel to me. He was twisting this way and that across the strip of grass, spraying each tree with Windex as he went. "What you doin? Twista?" I asked. "Just cleanin' up around here, baby!" he responded with a smile. I smiled back before opening the heavy metal cage door to enter the corner store. I dug a few quarters out of my pocket and inserted them into the Ms.Pacman machine. After about an hour of practice I was totally ready for one final game. I really felt I had a shot at breaking the high score at this point so I dug my hands into my pockets once more. This time, much to my dismay, I couldn't even find a dime. I exited the store with my head down. Twista confronted me immediately, "don't look so blue, Baby" he said, before placing his palms on his ears and tilting his head left then right. A quarter fell from each ear into his palm, he smiled silently and held them out to me. I thanked him before hurrying back inside, and though I didn't get the high score I got pretty damn close. I don't know if he even knew that I'd been playing Ms. Pacman. It seemed more likely that he'd simply read the dissapointment on my face and somehow known that this was one of those problems that 50 cents could remedy.

6 comments:

  1. You've got a good characterization here. I'd be worried if you continued on with this piece that it would sentimentalize Twista, because it seems like it might be hinting at that now.

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  2. I have no clue what this work is about. It seems like a rags to riches story in the beginning. Then you make "Twista" sound like a generalized thug or dealer on the streets. And at the end he is giving you money and reading your mind? I think your a little all over the place on this one.

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  3. I really enjoyed this piece. I feel that it could easily be expanded into a larger piece that talks about similar humorous stories with Twista or other characters that you encounter in the city.

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  4. "Cheery crack enthusiast?" Despite the fact that his predictions... (proofread for grammar). Otherwise, this is working: beginning, middle, end.

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  5. Hahaha I like the part about him cleaning the palm trees (though its probably not safe to allow him within quarter reaching distance of you).

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  6. I would like to for the scene to slow down at the moment of encounter the second time between the speaker and Twista. this is important to the piece because its the magic and unexpected of the event.

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